T2+Narrative+Writing

Wednesday 8 June 2011

WALT identify similes and metaphors.

S.C. - We can identify the similes which use 'as' We can identify the similes which use 'like' We can identify metaphors We can explain what the similes and metaphors mean/are telling us about what we are reading

//Metaphors// are a way to compare to by saying that one thing is another thing. For example, we say somebody is a //fool//. In the past in Europe, a fool was a person who entertained the king or queen by doing silly things. The fool was a kind of clown. He often did crazy or stupid things to make people laugh. So when we call somebody a fool we really mean that he or she is doing something silly or stupid. We don’t really mean that they are somebody who entertains the king or queen. We are using a metaphor. What do we mean when we say these things: When we //say someone is a pig// we really mean that_ That they are fat When we //call someone an angel// we really mean that goody good If we //say someone is a giant// we really mean that they are tall When //we call a man an ogre or a woman a witch// we really mean ugly When somebody plays cards and //we call them a shark//, we really mean that They are sneeky or tricky If we say that //somebody is a volcano ready to explode//, we really mean that full and had to much food When we say somebody is //bright// we mean that ﻿They are smart

Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could say that //Dan is a giant//. Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is: tall Levi is a giraffe kind Hamish is nice fast Korban is fast slow I am slow smart Braydon is a smarty fat a pig is fat!!!!!!!!!!!! sneaky ruben is sneaky angry Seth is angry beautiful Alex is ugly Peacocks are hidious stubborn My Sister is stubben short Dav is small thin luke is anarexic silly Korban scared easily Josh

Similes are a way to compare two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’. For example, if I want to say that somebody //swims well//, I can say they //swim like a fish// because fish swim well. There are two basic patterns that you can use. verb + like + noun She swims like a fish. He looks like an ogre. She plays like a pro. He walks like a duck. She acts like a fool. as + adjective + as + noun He is as tall as a giant. She is as fast as a rocket. He is as graceful as a swan. She is as sneaky as a fox. He is as quiet as a mouse. How could I say that somebody: runs fast is pretty jumps well is strong How could I say that something: is hard feels soft is sweet feels rough is heavy sounds noisy is light

How could I say that somebody: runs fast is pretty jumps well is strong How could I say that something: is hard feels soft is sweet feels rough is heavy sounds noisy is light

__Thursday 9 June 2011__


 * W.A.L.T** We are learning to identify and use alliteration in our writing

S.C. We can identify alliteration in text We can create examples of alliteration on different topics consonents sounds

b Bob builds buildings with brown bricks. c Connor chiped carrots at cool conrad. d Deric the dimwitt drinks and drives dericks dead f Fat Fred fished for five thousand five hudered and fiffty five flat flouder but Fred friends Fitzy, Fredrick Fin and Farmer fraggy fished for fried fish for farmer fred Fins fat feverish friend g h j k l m n p q r s t v w x y z

__Tuesday 14 June 2011__

WALT- use our sences to help describe in our writing.

S.C. We can describe what our marshmallow

Looks like

The colour of a my sisters room. It puffs up like a hot air balloon. Spingkled with white flour like a cloud drifting in the calm breeze.

smells like Smells like a sweet sprinkle of of gleaming icing sugar.

tasts like The shell like surface cracks into a sweet tast. My tast buds tingle as it meets my mouth.

feels like feels like a rubbery piece of caramello chocolate desolving. the surface of the smooth flour soon changes into a spongy puffy pillow.

__Monday 20 June 2011__


 * __WALT - identify personifications and use them in our writing__**

S.C. - we can identify the human trait being described we can identify the object being given a human trait we can write our own examples of personification we can explain why this helps to create a picture in our mind

applied to the object or idea.
 * Directions:** In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is

1. The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest. What is being personified? __wind__ Which human trait or quality is given? __whispered__

2. The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers. What is being personified? __flowers__ Which human trait or quality is given? __happy__

3. As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us. What is being personified? __sun__ Which human trait or quality is given? __beat__

4. Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic. What is being personified? __time__ Which human trait or quality is given? __crawled__

5. The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song. What is being personified? __chainsaw__ Which human trait or quality is given? __sang__


 * Personification Worksheet**
 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.

6. When Monica walked through the shoe store, each shiny pair of high heels called out to her. What is being personified? __shoes__ Which human trait or quality is given? __calling__

7. When the patriots defeated the redcoat army, freedom rang across the fruited plains. What is being personified? __plains__ Which human trait or quality is given? __rang__

8. As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly. What is being personified? __pencil__ Which human trait or quality is given? __walked__

9. Kelly was so happy that Tom and she were moving in together, but when she walked into her new residence, she dropped her suitcase. She had never seen the inside of the house which Tom’s grandmother had given them, and though she was grateful to receive such a nice gift, the ugly yellow wallpaper in the kitchen screamed at her. She knew she would have a lot of work to do to make her new house livable. What is being personified? __wallpaper__ Which human trait or quality is given? __screamed__

10. William knew that he shouldn’t have eaten the last cookie out of the cookie jar. He knew that his father loved to eat chocolate chip cookies after work, but William ate the last one anyway. Now as he waited for his father to come home, guilt poked and chewed at William. As delicious as the cookie was, William now wished that he had never opened that cookie jar. What is being personified? __guilt__ Which human trait or quality is given? chewing





__**//Dialogue//**__

“come play with me Lila”Shouted Kobey.

Kobey mumbled,”I love school.”

“lets go play” Sang Lila, running towards the play ground. Kobey was so supprised to find the mystery paper. “ I wonder how long this has been here Kobey mumbled.

Kobey was so supprised to find the mystery paper. “ I wonder how long this has been here Kobey mumbled.

Before
__Mystery__

==It was a boring afternoon for Sam and Corban couldn’t think of anything to do. This needs to be more exciting and really catch my attention! They thought about going to the the ancient tree hut in the old rimu tree. Capital letter for a name They went up the old rotten ladder and saw something mysterious a book with a golden map on it. They walked over carefully not knowing what was going to happen next, ==

==Corban being the older brother he picked up the book the gold number 7 started glowing and he dropped the book fell and it opened to a page with all this strange righting. Suddenly Corban and Sam felt like they were being sucked into the book and then they were gone. ==

==Yelling and screaming the y  splatted into the middle of now h ere. The dirt was puffing up from them falling. Coughing Sam and Corban were looking at a little dot and it looked like it was coming towards them. They hid behind a old boulder. the object came closer it appeared to be people in an old truck carrying all these kid like they had been kidnapped and were trying to escape. Then about 500 metres away from them they saw something glowing. They waited until the vehicle was out of sight and then it was time to go and check out the treasure. Then Sam said that this looked like the treasure in the book they had read when they were younger and they reward was $100,000 for getting it back to earth. All they had to do was shine it at the sun and they would return. It was a cloudy day so they were not going to escape today. but suddenly they noticed another truck, the same truck, they were coming back to get them they were horrified. they  quckliy hid staunchly behind old cactus. Then they both got grabbed behind the their necks and they leaded over to the truck. Sam woke up unsure on were he was minutes later Corban woke up and though <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">t <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> the same as Sam. They needed to get out. far out over the horizon Sam saw the the sun rising today was the day they had to escape from them other wise they would be trapped forever.Sam being The brainiac soon enough had figured out how to escape and they were off. Running after them were the strange kidnappers they weren’t going to look back because one small mistake and this could be their home for the rest of their life. ==

==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> They had their treasure and the sun all they had to do was shine the treasure at the sun and they would be back home. Sam shouted to go Corban shone the treasure it started to glow and they were picked up like it was a gigantic <span style="background-color: #ffff00; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">vacume <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">sucking them up. They got chucked back up into the corner of the play house but there was no sign of the treasure. then their mum called for afternoon tea. the boys couldn’t figure out how long they had been gone for and the could have only been allowed the treasure in that mysterious land. At least they were safe and back to the real world then Sam quietly mumbled that they would be rich if they had the treasure in there hand right now. at least they were alright and safe. ==

==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Then Corban mumbled sacredly that what would happnen if he opened another book? ==

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Next Learning Steps
==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Correct punctuation! You need to focus on including commas in your writing as some of your sentences are too long and need to comma’s to help them make sense. You are also putting fullstops where they are not needed and not all your sentences start with a capital letter. == ==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Vary your sentence beginnings - most of your sentences begin with either “they” or “then”. == ==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Develop your characters personalities. I know nothing about them! == ==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Describe the setting - use your senses in your writing to create an image in the reader’s mind. ==

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Syncopate; font-size: 36pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Mystery

==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Just another boring afternoon for Sam and Corban Bang! it was only mum getting ready for afternnoon tea,they thought about going to the the ancient tree hut in the old Rimu tree. After there dad re asuring it was safe they went up the old rotten ladder and saw something mysterious a book with a golden map on it. Then they walked over carefully not knowing what was going to happen next, ==

==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Corban being the older brother he picked up the book the gold number 7 started glowing and he dropped the book fell and it opened to a page with all this strange righting. Suddenly Corban and Sam felt like they were being sucked into the book and then they were gone. ==

==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Yelling and screaming they splatted into the middle of nowere. The dirt was puffing up from them falling. Coughing Sam and Corban were looking at a little dot and it looked like it was coming towards them. Quietly they hid behind a old boulder. the object came closer it appeared to be people in an old truck carrying all these kid like they had been kidnapped and were trying to escape. Then about 500 metres away from them they saw something glowing. They waited until the vehicle was out of sight and then it was time to go and check out the treasure. Then Sam said that this looked like the treasure in the book they had read when they were younger and they reward was $100,000 for getting it back to earth all they had to do was shine it at the sun and they would return. It was a cloudy day so they were not going to escape today. but suddenly they noticed another truck, the same truck, they were coming back to get them they were horrified. they quikly hid staunchly behind old cactus. Then they both got grabbed behind the their necks and they leaded over to the truck. Sam woke up unsure on were he was minutes later Corban woke up and thought the same as Sam. They needed to get out. far out over the horizon Sam saw the the sun rising today was the day they had to escape from them other wise they would be trapped forever.Sam being The brainac soon enough had figured out how to escape and they were off Sam re read the his plan with his big glasses Running after them were the strange kidnappers they weren’t going to look back because one small mistake and this could be their home for the rest of their life. ==

==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> They had their treasure and the sun all they had to do was shine the treasure at the sun and they would be back home. Sam shouted to go Corban shone the treasure it started to glow and they were picked up like it was a gigantic vacuum sucking them up. They got chucked back up into the corner of the play house but there was no sign of the treasure. then their mum called for afternoon tea. the boys couldn’t figure out how long they had been gone for and the could have only been allowed the treasure in that mysterious land. At least they were safe and back to the real world then Sam quietly mumbled that they would be rich if they had the treasure in there hand right now. at least they were alright and safe. ==

==<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Then Corban mumbled sacredly that what would happen if he opened any other book? ==